The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
Gives information» можно заменить на «illustrates» или сразу можно написать «compares» (но структура предложения поменяется).
«Educational problems» можно заменить на «learning difficulties»
«children» можно заменить на «students»
«Faced by» можно заменить на «experienced by» или сделать предложение не в passive voice, а в active voice и заменить на «experience»
INTRODUCTION(PARAPHRASING)
Gives information
Different
Educational problems
Children
Faced by
Illustrates(Compares)
Various (or 7)
Learning difficulties
Students
Experience
The table illustrates the percentage of students who experienced 7 learning difficulties in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
OVERVIEW What do we see?
OVERVIEW
Overall, the percentage of children with educational issues in school A was substantially higher than in school B both in 2005 and 2015. However, over a period of 10 years, while the proportion of children with learning problems in school A dropped slightly, the percentage of children facing various issues in learning in school B saw a modest increase in 5 out of 7 areas.
BODY PARAGRAPH 1 How will you group information?
Do not include every detail.
Group by similarities, trends, categories, or years.
Compare or contrast the information.
BODY PARAGRAPH 1 How will you group information?
In 2005, the most problematic two areas of learning for students of school A were concentration in lessons (40%) and following instructions (42%). In contrast, the proportion of students struggling with following instructions in school B was only 6 %, being one of the least problematic areas for this school. 14% and 15 % of students in school B experienced greatest learning issues while expressing ideas verbally and concentrating in lessons.
BODY PARAGRAPH 2 How will you group information?
Within 10 years, school A saw a considerable decrease in the two most problematic areas of learning by 22% and 24% for concentration and following instructions respectively, whereas the proportions of the least problematic areas in school B doubled - from 5% to 10% in spelling, and from 6% to 12% in following instructions.
VOCABULARY USED
Обратите внимание, какие мы использовали linking words:
Overall - для предоставления общей информации
In contrast - для обозначения контраста
Over a period of 10 years - по прошествии 10 лет
However - однако
Within 10 years - в течение 10 лет
Respectively - соответственно
Whereas - для обозначения контраста/сравнения
Для описания изменений в процентах мы использовали:
Dropped slightly - немного снизился
Saw a modest increase - произошло незначительное увеличение
Saw a considerable decrease - произошло значительное уменьшение
Doubled - удвоилось
Для сравнения мы использовали:
Substantially higher - значительно выше
TABLE ESSAY
The table illustrates the percentage of students who experienced 7 learning difficulties in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
Overall, the percentage of children with educational issues in school A was substantially higher than in school B both in 2005 and 2015. However, over a period of 10 years, while the proportion of children with learning problems in school A dropped slightly, the percentage of children facing various issues in learning in school B saw a modest increase in 5 out of 7 areas.
In 2005, the most problematic two areas of learning for students of school A were concentration in lessons (40%) and following instructions (42%). In contrast, the proportion of students struggling with following instructions in school B was only 6 %, being one of the least problematic areas for this school. 14% and 15 % of students in school B experienced greatest learning issues while expressing ideas verbally and concentrating in lessons.
Within 10 years, school A saw a considerable decrease in the two most problematic areas of learning by 22% and 24% for concentration and following instructions respectively, whereas the proportions of the least problematic areas in school B doubled - from 5% to 10% in spelling, and from 6% to 12% in following instructions.
HOMETASK
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